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6102 pts ★ RacerOn 2023-06-04 at 23:54:16
Final episode soon guys... 👀
On 2023-03-27 at 21:59:01
Are The Shards Based On Kirby 64 The Crystal Shards? Because I Feel Like Multiple Things Have Shards In Them And It Shouldn't Be Considered Copying Another Thing Due To The Amount Of Times Shards Have Been Used.
Nudge basically created a fanfic with shards right before this one so...
On 2022-10-06 at 01:19:16
Off-topic: Ranking of the 5 current fanfics
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This
Then we don't have the same tastes
To me, swearing isn't an issue at all and can make the fanfic more funny, or more sad, more exciting, I don't know. It's like a spice.
I also think MysteryMan's one is good, but I prefer Danganronpa and KohLanta to it pog
especially because I'm more familiar with 1) the style and 2) the roster of charactersTo me its more like
1) Koh-Lanta Mario 2022 10/10
2) Danganronpa MKPC 9,5/10
3) Toadal Drama n Knuckles 9/10
4) MKPC Archipel 4/10
5) The Twilightverse 3,99/10
Your fanfic is much better than that
Uh excuse me, I don't think it is. It's not well-written contrary to every other fanfic except Twilightverse, it's also very weird, boring, it fails the twists, it's not exciting at all, there's no suspense and there's no fun 😞
I like how it is more a different theme from the rest. While the others are about action, I feel like yours is more comedy, with a bit of action sprinkled in every so often
But comedy is boring and cringe 😔
Everytime I try to do some action scenes it fails.
The scene of the fight with Ralsei in my fanfic just didn't felt grand at all, it felt like... a moment where me and you, Nudge, died, and that's it
There's nothing that could make you excited about the next episode, the next scene, no there's nothing.
On 2022-10-06 at 01:12:49
Off-topic: Ranking of the 5 current fanfics
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This
Then we don't have the same tastes
To me, swearing isn't an issue at all and can make the fanfic more funny, or more sad, more exciting, I don't know. It's like a spice.
I also think MysteryMan's one is good, but I prefer Danganronpa and KohLanta to it pog
especially because I'm more familiar with 1) the style and 2) the roster of charactersTo me its more like
1) Koh-Lanta Mario 2022 10/10
2) Danganronpa MKPC 9,5/10
3) Toadal Drama n Knuckles 9/10
4) MKPC Archipel 4/10
5) The Twilightverse 3,99/10
Your fanfic is much better than that
Uh excuse me, I don't think it is. It's not well-written contrary to every other fanfic except Twilightverse, it's also very weird, boring, it fails the twists, it's not exciting at all, there's no suspense and there's no fun 😞
On 2022-10-06 at 01:09:50
Off-topic: Ranking of the 5 current fanfics
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This
Then we don't have the same tastes
To me, swearing isn't an issue at all and can make the fanfic more funny, or more sad, more exciting, I don't know. It's like a spice.
I also think MysteryMan's one is good, but I prefer Danganronpa and KohLanta to it pog
especially because I'm more familiar with 1) the style and 2) the roster of charactersTo me its more like
1) Koh-Lanta Mario 2022 10/10
2) Danganronpa MKPC 9,5/10
3) Toadal Drama n Knuckles 9/10
4) MKPC Archipel 4/10
5) The Twlightverse 3,99/10
On 2022-10-06 at 01:04:28
It seems like this topic isn't working. What is your descion:
To this series to end?
Or the series to live on?
To this series to end?
Or the series to live on?
Keep it going, but make things make sense, and have effect.
However, I’d say redo Season 2, Episode one, since some stuff feels weird, mainly max coming back, since that removes a lot of character development knowing someone that they almost managed to become friends with died
In episode 2 you'll find out why he managed to live.
Yes but it removes character development and is a boring twist
ngl I have to agree. I've read it 2 times, and thought to myself: Am I boring? Or do I suck at stories?
If you want advice for how to write fanfics, look at my episode for this fanfic, or re-read MKPC danganronpa
Yeah exactly.
Your end was pretty epic and it felt like Danganronpa, it actually felt exciting, made sense, was flowing well and was fun.
While for the Ralsei's parts... I'm sorry Ralsei but this ain't it
On 2022-10-06 at 01:01:35
It seems like this topic isn't working. What is your descion:
To this series to end?
Or the series to live on?
To this series to end?
Or the series to live on?
Keep it going, but make things make sense, and have effect.
However, I’d say redo Season 2, Episode one, since some stuff feels weird, mainly max coming back, since that removes a lot of character development knowing someone that they almost managed to become friends with died
In episode 2 you'll find out why he managed to live.
Yes but it removes character development and is a boring twist
ngl I have to agree. I've read it 2 times, and thought to myself: Am I boring? Or do I suck at stories?
You're not boring when you're writing something. It just doesn't makes sense, that's another issue. It just feels unnatural and meh that's another issue, but it's not that boring.
On 2022-10-06 at 00:54:20
It seems like this topic isn't working. What is your descion:
To this series to end?
Or the series to live on?
To this series to end?
Or the series to live on?
I want it to live on. You don't need to stop, you need to improve. And I can help you, but Nudge as well, Max as well etc.
On 2022-10-06 at 00:49:59
Time for a review
*sigh* well honestly, I'm not the biggest fan of this fanfic.
It lacks a concept, it lacks identity, something to stand out. The sentences are weird or cringe most of the time, sometimes they doesn't fit the character they're supposed to represent.
Also, some things are truly ridiculous. The way every character act. They don't have proper personnality and they all feel like the same. Plus some moments are truly ridiculous. I've never seen someone who's throwing himself out of the window, just because he wonders about something passing by, the colors were unfitting, the glow up was badly done...
Nice effort, keep going
*sigh* well honestly, I'm not the biggest fan of this fanfic.
It lacks a concept, it lacks identity, something to stand out. The sentences are weird or cringe most of the time, sometimes they doesn't fit the character they're supposed to represent.
Also, some things are truly ridiculous. The way every character act. They don't have proper personnality and they all feel like the same. Plus some moments are truly ridiculous. I've never seen someone who's throwing himself out of the window, just because he wonders about something passing by, the colors were unfitting, the glow up was badly done...
Nice effort, keep going
On 2022-10-06 at 00:44:02
The question is: Why would they steal this fanfic? Out of the 5 current ones, it is definitely the worst (nothing makes sense) so the only reason why I see him doing it is because he was a knoah alt (not garunteed, but highly likely) and wanted to steal the fanfic with him in it
its in 4th place...
Based on followers, yes, but based on my opinion, it’s in last (same with Lely (I think))
I agree. The results were pretty expected. You get the more because you're slightly more popular, definitively more mature, but also because your fanfic is better, and since it implicates more people, more people are staying tuned
The fact Fways still find himself in 2nd place nowadays is pretty startling at first. I mean the quality is absolutely godly, yet he's not as active as before so less people acknowledge him.
But between the old members who discover a sequel, and the new members who discover a new series,
the hype around it is pretty important and deserved in my opinion.
About the MysteryMan's one, we'll he's less popular, it doesn't implicates MKPC members so it's why it's got less followers, yet for me Twilightverse is pretty bad, there is a lot of issues, but it's still ok anyways
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1On 2022-10-06 at 00:38:17
ok since someone I copying my series I have to sacrifice the Anime kid
©Twilightverse
©Twilightverse
Do you think toxic people and rule breakers will suddenly stop stealing your fanfic/topic concept, just because you put a copyright in the title?
Agreed (also I just realised who made it)
But in that situation Ralsei is clearly freaking out. Okay "Lidelle" stole the title, but it has nothing to do with the Twilightverse tbh.
And anyways @-Ralsei- you truly have copyright obsession or what ? Stop spreading it everywhere, it doesn't have any utility
uh no I'm not. It justs feels right to copyright it, its a series.
Why do you have to copyright it ? It's forbidden to use a name, anyways, and whether if there is a copyright or no
+ bad guys don't care about a copyright sign
don't forget about lawsuits.. just saying.
Bro we're on a racing game community and you're talking about copyright and lawsuits 😭😭😭💀💀💀
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1On 2022-10-06 at 00:21:10
ok since someone I copying my series I have to sacrifice the Anime kid
©Twilightverse
©Twilightverse
Do you think toxic people and rule breakers will suddenly stop stealing your fanfic/topic concept, just because you put a copyright in the title?
Agreed (also I just realised who made it)
But in that situation Ralsei is clearly freaking out. Okay "Lidelle" stole the title, but it has nothing to do with the Twilightverse tbh.
And anyways @-Ralsei- you truly have copyright obsession or what ? Stop spreading it everywhere, it doesn't have any utility
uh no I'm not. It justs feels right to copyright it, its a series.
Why do you have to copyright it ? It's forbidden to use a name, anyways, and whether if there is a copyright or no
+ bad guys don't care about a copyright sign
22On 2022-10-05 at 22:18:58
ok since someone I copying my series I have to sacrifice the Anime kid
©Twilightverse
©Twilightverse
Do you think toxic people and rule breakers will suddenly stop stealing your fanfic/topic concept, just because you put a copyright in the title?
Agreed (also I just realised who made it)
But in that situation Ralsei is clearly freaking out. Okay "Lidelle" stole the title, but it has nothing to do with the Twilightverse tbh.
And anyways @-Ralsei- you truly have copyright obsession or what ? Stop spreading it everywhere, it doesn't have any utility
22On 2022-10-05 at 22:12:23
ok since someone I copying my series I have to sacrifice the Anime kid
©Twilightverse
©Twilightverse
Do you think toxic people and rule breakers will suddenly stop stealing your fanfic/topic concept, just because you put a copyright in the title?
22On 2022-09-24 at 00:39:08
Episode whatever: I’m ending the season myself to get season 2 ready for his unban
What happened last time:
Toadboiiiii: hi I’m evil
Nudge: SO, WHAT IS THE PLAN?!?!?!
Ralsei: YOU EXPECT ME TO KNOW?!?!?!
Nudge: I HAVE AN IDEA!!! I NEED TO GET INTO THE COMPUTER ROOM SAFELY AND THEN DO SOME HACKING!!!
Lely: I have an idea. Please don’t get hurt
Ralsei: I HAVE AN IDEA!!! IM GOING TO ACT AS BAIT, SINCE IF I GET ATTACKED I CAN HEAL MYSELF!!!
Parakoopa: I have an idea. I’m going to fly nudge into the vent so that he can sneak in
Max: I have an idea! GIVE! ME! LELY!
Master8: I have an idea. I escape
ToadBoi: I have an idea, YOU STOP RECYCLING THE SAME JOKE OVER AND OVER
*Parakoopa flew Nudge into the vents and into the computer room*
Ralsei: Come here max. You know you want to kill me
Max: NO!!! I just want Lely
Lely: Why do you want me though? What did I do to you?
Max: THAT DOESNT MATTER!!! In order to get Lely, I suppose I’m going to need to deal with Ralsei
*He immedietly punched Ralsei to the ground, knocking him sword out of his hand*
ToadBoi: Good job Max. Now, take his sword and FINISH HIM OFF
*He did exactly that, but right as the sword was about to stab into him, he stopped*
ToadBoi: WHAT ARE YOU DOING!?!?!? I!!! SAID!!! KILL HIM!!!!!!!!!!!!
Max: NEVER!!! I have broken free from the curse you out on me
Nudge: So, did I manage to shut down the brain ship in Max?
MonoBoi: WHAT!!! HOW DID YOU KNOW!!!!!!!!!!!!
Nudge: it was actually quite obvious. Now, WE NEED TO RUN
Max: I’m afraid I can’t
Lely: Why not? You can come with us now that you aren’t trying to kill us
Max: You see… I have one last thing I need to do, and I’m going to need to to leave ahead of me
Lely: NO! I don’t want to go without you. I can’t leave any friends behind
Max: You really consider me a friend after all I just did to you?
Ralsei: Lely, just come with us. If it’s what he wants, then we should do as he pleases
Lely: Fine
*Everyone except left the castle*
Nudge: So, what shall we talk about while waiting for max?
Master8: I want to talk about that barrier around the castle
Lely: Barrier? Then how is max supposed to get out?
Max: I can’t
Lely: Why would you do this to yourself? Why don’t you want to join us?
Max: Truth is, this is the self destruct sequence. The barrier is set up around the castle when it is activated, to avoid explosions leaving the castle
Nudge: Will this castle make up its mind whether it is medieval or futuristic?
*As he said that, the explosions started going off*
Max: Goodbye everyone
Lely: NOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!
*as Lely started crying, the entirety of the castle blew up, killing everything in it, including Max*
What happened last time:
Toadboiiiii: hi I’m evil
Nudge: SO, WHAT IS THE PLAN?!?!?!
Ralsei: YOU EXPECT ME TO KNOW?!?!?!
Nudge: I HAVE AN IDEA!!! I NEED TO GET INTO THE COMPUTER ROOM SAFELY AND THEN DO SOME HACKING!!!
Lely: I have an idea. Please don’t get hurt
Ralsei: I HAVE AN IDEA!!! IM GOING TO ACT AS BAIT, SINCE IF I GET ATTACKED I CAN HEAL MYSELF!!!
Parakoopa: I have an idea. I’m going to fly nudge into the vent so that he can sneak in
Max: I have an idea! GIVE! ME! LELY!
Master8: I have an idea. I escape
ToadBoi: I have an idea, YOU STOP RECYCLING THE SAME JOKE OVER AND OVER
*Parakoopa flew Nudge into the vents and into the computer room*
Ralsei: Come here max. You know you want to kill me
Max: NO!!! I just want Lely
Lely: Why do you want me though? What did I do to you?
Max: THAT DOESNT MATTER!!! In order to get Lely, I suppose I’m going to need to deal with Ralsei
*He immedietly punched Ralsei to the ground, knocking him sword out of his hand*
ToadBoi: Good job Max. Now, take his sword and FINISH HIM OFF
*He did exactly that, but right as the sword was about to stab into him, he stopped*
ToadBoi: WHAT ARE YOU DOING!?!?!? I!!! SAID!!! KILL HIM!!!!!!!!!!!!
Max: NEVER!!! I have broken free from the curse you out on me
Nudge: So, did I manage to shut down the brain ship in Max?
MonoBoi: WHAT!!! HOW DID YOU KNOW!!!!!!!!!!!!
Nudge: it was actually quite obvious. Now, WE NEED TO RUN
Max: I’m afraid I can’t
Lely: Why not? You can come with us now that you aren’t trying to kill us
Max: You see… I have one last thing I need to do, and I’m going to need to to leave ahead of me
Lely: NO! I don’t want to go without you. I can’t leave any friends behind
Max: You really consider me a friend after all I just did to you?
Ralsei: Lely, just come with us. If it’s what he wants, then we should do as he pleases
Lely: Fine
*Everyone except left the castle*
Nudge: So, what shall we talk about while waiting for max?
Master8: I want to talk about that barrier around the castle
Lely: Barrier? Then how is max supposed to get out?
Max: I can’t
Lely: Why would you do this to yourself? Why don’t you want to join us?
Max: Truth is, this is the self destruct sequence. The barrier is set up around the castle when it is activated, to avoid explosions leaving the castle
Nudge: Will this castle make up its mind whether it is medieval or futuristic?
*As he said that, the explosions started going off*
Max: Goodbye everyone
Lely: NOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!
*as Lely started crying, the entirety of the castle blew up, killing everything in it, including Max*
This was so good that I thought it was Danganronpa. Though what a sad end.
11On 2022-09-17 at 21:57:19
My color : is horrendous and unfitting
1On 2022-09-16 at 22:17:50
MAX DID NOT KILL YOU !
He said he would have had more fun if he did so, so he wanted it. So yeah, it's pretty interesting to have plot twist,
but implement them correctly and make them realistic
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122On 2022-09-16 at 22:14:51
First, I thought we should stop treating him like that because that's not cute and that's mean, but I guess he likes it if we thinks he's badass, it's his point
2On 2022-09-16 at 22:12:57
But Like the plot twist with Toadboiiii?
The plot twist have to be realistic. Toadboi as a nice person is as irrealistic as me disliking kpop and cute things,
or Max killing me
11On 2022-09-16 at 22:11:20
Hampter: Last time on The Twlightverse!
Hampter:And Now Back To The Twilight Zone!
Ralsei: Ugh.... What happene- YO THE GUYS ARE BACK!
Hampter: Woah! How did they come back....?
Hampter: What...? WHY I'M WEARING A SKIRT!????
The Great Gods: BAHAHAHAHA!
Knoah: Ugh.... What Happened!
Hampter: Apparently Me, Quorzel, And Tendo Got Renamed, And We Have Powers.
???: Hello? Hey You!
Both: Lely!?
Lely: How I ran into you guys!?
Both: IDK!
Max-Bros: It's Been so long!
Lely: Wow! Your Not Snorlax Anymore!
Max-Bros: Yep! I'm now Senko!
Lely: Cooooool!
Both: *High-five*
Kay: Damn, I can't believe your here..!
Ralsei: You seem hurt... Luckily, I have a power that can heal people, the spell is called Heal Prayer!
*Heals*
Lely: Thanks!
Ralsei: No problem! Want to join our adventure to the Twilight Zone?
Lely: Sure!
Lely has joined the gang.
Ralsei: Lets go! We have a full team now! Ok, Back to the adventure!
Parakoopa: Yeyyyyy!
Master: Lets Gooo!
Hampter: And Now Back To The Twilightverse!
Season 1: Chapter 5. The final Comfrontation.
Ralsei: Guys! Its The Twilight Zone!
Lely: I've found it! This is another area For The K-Prophecy!
Ralsei: The Hell Is That!?
Lely: Its Apparently supposed to be when the great gods form a powerful titan... No one knows of it... But I do think there K-pop stars!
Master: Hahaha.... You're here.. I MUST FOLLOW KINGS COMMAND!!!
*knockout*
Hampter: Where are we!?
Knoah: I don't know...? Hey, where is Max-bros??
Max: Bahahahaha! I tricked you!!!!
Kay: So thats the weird feeling I got from Max And Master..!
Max-Bros: You've been setenced to life for trying to break into the Holy area!! But to be honest, I would've been more fun watching you die in pain by the roaring!
Lely: Why you're doing this max...
Max-Bros: I'm sorry... but I can't lose this job.
Lely: WHYYYY!!!
*Max-Bros runs away*
Hampter: Huh. Weird- Wait, Where is Ralsei!?
*overhears Ralsei and Toadboiii*
Ralsei: Yall Guys in jail SHUT UP!!
Toadboiiii: Yea!!
Hampter: Toadboiiii!? Ralsei!? What you're doing here!?
Ralsei: Trying to figure out the code to unlock your jailcell! Now hush! Lemme figure it out!....
*Unlocks the Code*
*Jailroom Unlocks*
Hampter: We got out! Thanks, Ralsei And Toadboiiii!
Both: You're welcome!
Toadboiiii: NOW LETS GET THE KING!!!
Parakoopa: Yea!.... But.. Don't we need a plan?
Toadboiiii: Yeah, Lets figure out a Plan!
To Be Continued...
Hampter:And Now Back To The Twilight Zone!
Ralsei: Ugh.... What happene- YO THE GUYS ARE BACK!
Hampter: Woah! How did they come back....?
Hampter: What...? WHY I'M WEARING A SKIRT!????
The Great Gods: BAHAHAHAHA!
Knoah: Ugh.... What Happened!
Hampter: Apparently Me, Quorzel, And Tendo Got Renamed, And We Have Powers.
???: Hello? Hey You!
Both: Lely!?
Lely: How I ran into you guys!?
Both: IDK!
Max-Bros: It's Been so long!
Lely: Wow! Your Not Snorlax Anymore!
Max-Bros: Yep! I'm now Senko!
Lely: Cooooool!
Both: *High-five*
Kay: Damn, I can't believe your here..!
Ralsei: You seem hurt... Luckily, I have a power that can heal people, the spell is called Heal Prayer!
*Heals*
Lely: Thanks!
Ralsei: No problem! Want to join our adventure to the Twilight Zone?
Lely: Sure!
Lely has joined the gang.
Ralsei: Lets go! We have a full team now! Ok, Back to the adventure!
Parakoopa: Yeyyyyy!
Master: Lets Gooo!
Hampter: And Now Back To The Twilightverse!
Season 1: Chapter 5. The final Comfrontation.
Ralsei: Guys! Its The Twilight Zone!
Lely: I've found it! This is another area For The K-Prophecy!
Ralsei: The Hell Is That!?
Lely: Its Apparently supposed to be when the great gods form a powerful titan... No one knows of it... But I do think there K-pop stars!
Master: Hahaha.... You're here.. I MUST FOLLOW KINGS COMMAND!!!
*knockout*
Hampter: Where are we!?
Knoah: I don't know...? Hey, where is Max-bros??
Max: Bahahahaha! I tricked you!!!!
Kay: So thats the weird feeling I got from Max And Master..!
Max-Bros: You've been setenced to life for trying to break into the Holy area!! But to be honest, I would've been more fun watching you die in pain by the roaring!
Lely: Why you're doing this max...
Max-Bros: I'm sorry... but I can't lose this job.
Lely: WHYYYY!!!
*Max-Bros runs away*
Hampter: Huh. Weird- Wait, Where is Ralsei!?
*overhears Ralsei and Toadboiii*
Ralsei: Yall Guys in jail SHUT UP!!
Toadboiiii: Yea!!
Hampter: Toadboiiii!? Ralsei!? What you're doing here!?
Ralsei: Trying to figure out the code to unlock your jailcell! Now hush! Lemme figure it out!....
*Unlocks the Code*
*Jailroom Unlocks*
Hampter: We got out! Thanks, Ralsei And Toadboiiii!
Both: You're welcome!
Toadboiiii: NOW LETS GET THE KING!!!
Parakoopa: Yea!.... But.. Don't we need a plan?
Toadboiiii: Yeah, Lets figure out a Plan!
To Be Continued...
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