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[Fanfic] - MKPC Archipel (2024 Season)

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SI_Lely wrote:
Chapter 9 : Run Away
We need to be together to find out,
What's hiding at 9 and three quarters...

9:45PM

Cameron : Hahahaha... so you were not able to make it out safe. A broken ankle for your captain, oh isn't it unfortunate ?
James : What ? Oh no...
Cameron : Hmm... You all are so naive and weak. How can you search the fragments now, huh ?
Choco : That won't be our objective. Our objective will be to destroy you. I am texting the Green Team right now to rally them to us.
"hey everyone, pls come back. max's ankle is broken and we won't fight for the fragments. we need to emprison cameron, or worse. he hurt us, and badly.

When Lely received the message...
Lely : WAIT ! Choco texted me saying we need to emprison Cameron because he broke Max's ankle. We need to go back to help them fight him.
Nudge : What ? Huh ? No we won't. Eliminates concurrence.
Lely : But Cameron is a nuisance to the island, not less than Eli. We need to fight him and asap.
Nudge : Istg this kid....


Back to the Teal Team.
Krazey : C'mon bro. We barely did anything to you, why are you so mean ?
Cameron : Well, I have a story. But I'll spare you of it. Death is better than boredom, don't you think so ?
James : You are a horrible person !!!
Cameron : Heh. I know. But what can you do ? Nothing except crying.
Choco : Tell us the story ! WE WANT TO KNOW THE ANSWER !
Cameron : Heh. Okay, I guess. What can it hurt ? So basically, when I was a child, I was always unloved. Truth is, Ster and Chuck are my brothers. Chuck is the oldest, and Ster is the youngest. I am the middle child, I was always neglected. My parents did not care. They didn't scream at me, but they would always leave me on the side, as bored as I could be. So I want to handle my life all by myself, but, heh... Chuck and Ster keep me in check. But I had enough. I want to have fun and I want to have importance.
Nudge : Pick me ahh energy...
Choco : Oh thank lord, you are back !
Nudge : Yeah, 'cause Lely is right...
Lely : To fight a nuisance, we need to be together ! So the teams don't matter anymore. We'll be as one.

Choco : That's so true !
Krazey : First of all, yay. Second of all, why are you such an attention seeker ? I thought you were abused and disciplined as child, THAT would have been hella cool, but no, you're just the middle child. Oh welp.
Cameron : Do not try to play with the fire that runs within my veins and with the fire that I am...
Alice : That's my line, you unoriginal copycat. Build some personnality instead of being a blank copy of the others. That will build you, unlike all the attention seeking

Cameron : Okay that's it...

Cameron then got another boulder ; they were erupting from the mountain frequently. The rock was much faster than the last one.

Lely : No ! MAX !
Max : I can't move...

Lely hurried and carried Max out of the boulder's trajectory. It fell, and pushed the precedent one that stopped right before a cliff. The precedent boulder fell and made a huge hole in the hills. When this happened, some cars started to come towards the mountain.

Cameron then used another boulder to get down from the mountaintop and to fight the MKPCians.


VC : NO ! DO NOT TOUCH ME !
Cameron : I don't need consent, consent needs me. Heh.
Lely : DO NOT TOUCH HER ! *jumps*
Cameron : I will, and you along with her!
Max : Oh no you won't.
Nudge : You thought you were some sort of built monster ? You remain a Pianta, strong for sure, but not even that big. *throws a knife he kept in his pocket*
Cameron : OW !!! NO YOU WON'T LITTLE AMOUNT OF FUR SHIT, COME HERE !
Cameron had VC and Lely in his arms and threw both towards the rock. Luckily, they did not hit the cliff, but fell brutally on the ground and had trouble standing up. Cameron started to bleed from the sides, which made him even more angrier. Nudge was planning to throw another knife in Cameron's face, but Cameron took off the knife and threw it on Nudge. It only hurt one of his ears, but Nudge hissed at the pain.

Nudge : I will not waste my time with someone like you. *gets the knife off and throws him right in Cameron's face, but it gets caught in his tree*
Cameron : Heh... I don't intend to neither.

Both started running around in circles, trying to attack with knives and failed. In the meanwhile, Ben and Lely were talking.

Ben : We need to get one of these boulders, but how?
Lely : I don't know. Maybe try to throw Cameron on the cliff to generate vibrations and to make the rock crush him while he is unconscious.

Lely and Ben told everyone about their plan. Suddenly, Nudge tripped on a rock and Cameron was about to stab him with the knife. But by behind, Lely and Ben grabbed Cameron by the tree, threatening him with the knife on the edge of his neck.

Lely : Move and you die.
Cameron : You think you are scary ? Tears are dropping from your eyes and you are trembling.
Lely : Ve careful.
And when Cameron was about to stand up from the ground, James and Choco grabbed him by the sides, lift him up and threw him towards the cliff. Since his body was strong, the cliff slightly vibrated, and a boulder started getting down.

Cameron : NO... AHHH !

He tried to run but the boulder fell on his ankle, breaking it just like Max's.

Max : SEE HOW THAT FEELS !
Lely : DON'T EVER TRY AGAIN !
Nudge : Keep away from us.
VC : Umm... guys, wait.
Nudge : What?
VC : The police has arrived...

MKPC Archipel - 2024 Season
The end

Cameron having lots of lines

Ben: give me your lines?


lol but all jokes aside best episode yet, also epic cliffhanger cameron be gettin arrested 11/10

Who said that he was the one to be arrested ?
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Chapter 9 : Run Away
We need to be together to find out,
What's hiding at 9 and three quarters...

9:45PM

Cameron : Hahahaha... so you were not able to make it out safe. A broken ankle for your captain, oh isn't it unfortunate ?
James : What ? Oh no...
Cameron : Hmm... You all are so naive and weak. How can you search the fragments now, huh ?
Choco : That won't be our objective. Our objective will be to destroy you. I am texting the Green Team right now to rally them to us.
"hey everyone, pls come back. max's ankle is broken and we won't fight for the fragments. we need to emprison cameron, or worse. he hurt us, and badly.

When Lely received the message...
Lely : WAIT ! Choco texted me saying we need to emprison Cameron because he broke Max's ankle. We need to go back to help them fight him.
Nudge : What ? Huh ? No we won't. Eliminates concurrence.
Lely : But Cameron is a nuisance to the island, not less than Eli. We need to fight him and asap.
Nudge : Istg this kid....


Back to the Teal Team.
Krazey : C'mon bro. We barely did anything to you, why are you so mean ?
Cameron : Well, I have a story. But I'll spare you of it. Death is better than boredom, don't you think so ?
James : You are a horrible person !!!
Cameron : Heh. I know. But what can you do ? Nothing except crying.
Choco : Tell us the story ! WE WANT TO KNOW THE ANSWER !
Cameron : Heh. Okay, I guess. What can it hurt ? So basically, when I was a child, I was always unloved. Truth is, Ster and Chuck are my brothers. Chuck is the oldest, and Ster is the youngest. I am the middle child, I was always neglected. My parents did not care. They didn't scream at me, but they would always leave me on the side, as bored as I could be. So I want to handle my life all by myself, but, heh... Chuck and Ster keep me in check. But I had enough. I want to have fun and I want to have importance.
Nudge : Pick me ahh energy...
Choco : Oh thank lord, you are back !
Nudge : Yeah, 'cause Lely is right...
Lely : To fight a nuisance, we need to be together ! So the teams don't matter anymore. We'll be as one.

Choco : That's so true !
Krazey : First of all, yay. Second of all, why are you such an attention seeker ? I thought you were abused and disciplined as child, THAT would have been hella cool, but no, you're just the middle child. Oh welp.
Cameron : Do not try to play with the fire that runs within my veins and with the fire that I am...
Alice : That's my line, you unoriginal copycat. Build some personnality instead of being a blank copy of the others. That will build you, unlike all the attention seeking

Cameron : Okay that's it...

Cameron then got another boulder ; they were erupting from the mountain frequently. The rock was much faster than the last one.

Lely : No ! MAX !
Max : I can't move...

Lely hurried and carried Max out of the boulder's trajectory. It fell, and pushed the precedent one that stopped right before a cliff. The precedent boulder fell and made a huge hole in the hills. When this happened, some cars started to come towards the mountain.

Cameron then used another boulder to get down from the mountaintop and to fight the MKPCians.


VC : NO ! DO NOT TOUCH ME !
Cameron : I don't need consent, consent needs me. Heh.
Lely : DO NOT TOUCH HER ! *jumps*
Cameron : I will, and you along with her!
Max : Oh no you won't.
Nudge : You thought you were some sort of built monster ? You remain a Pianta, strong for sure, but not even that big. *throws a knife he kept in his pocket*
Cameron : OW !!! NO YOU WON'T LITTLE AMOUNT OF FUR SHIT, COME HERE !
Cameron had VC and Lely in his arms and threw both towards the rock. Luckily, they did not hit the cliff, but fell brutally on the ground and had trouble standing up. Cameron started to bleed from the sides, which made him even more angrier. Nudge was planning to throw another knife in Cameron's face, but Cameron took off the knife and threw it on Nudge. It only hurt one of his ears, but Nudge hissed at the pain.

Nudge : I will not waste my time with someone like you. *gets the knife off and throws him right in Cameron's face, but it gets caught in his tree*
Cameron : Heh... I don't intend to neither.

Both started running around in circles, trying to attack with knives and failed. In the meanwhile, Ben and Lely were talking.

Ben : We need to get one of these boulders, but how?
Lely : I don't know. Maybe try to throw Cameron on the cliff to generate vibrations and to make the rock crush him while he is unconscious.

Lely and Ben told everyone about their plan. Suddenly, Nudge tripped on a rock and Cameron was about to stab him with the knife. But by behind, Lely and Ben grabbed Cameron by the tree, threatening him with the knife on the edge of his neck.

Lely : Move and you die.
Cameron : You think you are scary ? Tears are dropping from your eyes and you are trembling.
Lely : Ve careful.
And when Cameron was about to stand up from the ground, James and Choco grabbed him by the sides, lift him up and threw him towards the cliff. Since his body was strong, the cliff slightly vibrated, and a boulder started getting down.

Cameron : NO... AHHH !

He tried to run but the boulder fell on his ankle, breaking it just like Max's.

Max : SEE HOW THAT FEELS !
Lely : DON'T EVER TRY AGAIN !
Nudge : Keep away from us.
VC : Umm... guys, wait.
Nudge : What?
VC : The police has arrived...

MKPC Archipel - 2024 Season
The end
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Fourner wrote:
im still doing the series cause why not :p


Do it... in your phone notes

Yeah I don't even care you won't get a word in the writing. But can you actually listen to what others have told you ? Others find it annoying, and I also told you it'd lead nowhere. Why are you so stubborn ? On a public forum, not only your opinion matters. You're playing with fire, but you are gonna get sanctioned someday. These little actions piss off everyone, including the mods.
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Chapter 9 : Run Away

Coming soon...
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Fourner wrote:
Im just gonna start i mini series where i put possible development for characters who dont have it at the moment

Episode 1, Ben

Ben being the Brat that nobody likes, i think it would be good for to slowly become less bratty.

But in a soon episode, he could get mad at his team for maybe cheating or something liek that, and go in his cabin, everyone thinks hes just being bratty but in episode 1 james said something nice about Ben i belive, and i want to build on that, so how about they ahve a talk and become freinds, James teaches Ben to be less bratty, And Ben can teach James to do better at challenges, i think this could be a improvment to both of their characters.

Thoughts?

I have already planned character development for every character, leave it to me
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SI_Invu wrote:
Chapter 8 : Good At Love
Is it your fault, or is it my thoughts ?
Max : Okay so. To whoever is in my team, I want us to stay together at all times. No separation, not even a single one.
Lely : I think we should go in small groups. VC and Noob, you should go for the beaches. Alice and Ben, try to not fight with each other and go for the hills and the caverns. Me and Nudge will go in the cities, if that is alright, and our meeting point will be the huts.
VC : You have great leadership skills
Nudge : I should complain but I feel like despite being the dumbest, you also have a lot of experience
Max : I think we should head for the mountaintop. There must be something high up there.

And with that, both teams began.
VC : Going from the mountain to the beach is gonna be so hard.
Noob : We should ask for vehicles.
VC : But we don't even have a license !
Noob : Tell me, who cares ?
VC : It's not that, but how do we even find one ?
Noob : True...

Max : Okay, this might be tough. The pathway is very thin, and the slope seems steep. I don't know if it's worth it.
Krazey : At least from there, you can see the fragments shining !
Max : What if they're just lampposts ?
Krazey : Something is up there ! I have a gut feeling.
Max : I think it's kind of dangerous... but okay, if you say so.


And with that, the Teal Team began climbing. Max's feet were slowly trying to walk carefully on the slope that felt almost like it was vertical. After five minutes, people got tired.

Choco : Ahh... I cannot feel my foot...
Angrybird : I feel so tired...
James : I don't trust any of this.
Max : It really does seem dangerous...
Krazey : Everything will be fine... we will get there.
Choco : Wait... I smell something...
Max : What ?
Choco : AHHHH ! BLOOD IS ON MY HAND ! THERE IS BLOOD !


As they started yelling, every of their teammates turned to them. Max used his phone's light to figure out what was happening ; and a dead, crushed Pianta was on the floor, full of blood.

Angrybird : WHAT ??? OH MY GOD !! WE NEED TO GO BACK !!!!
Dayzi : This seems to mean something... but what ?
Max : I don't know... but I'm scared.
Krazey : I... don't know.


And then suddenly, a boulder fell from the top of the mountain. He was going rapidly and was about to crush them. They all started yelling and running for their life, as the boulder continued to roll. After some time they ended up to the point where they were before, scared. Sadly, Max's ankle had twisted and he could not stand up anymore.

Max : I... can't even stand up.

The boy cried, as he felt weak and pained at the same time. The rest of his team was shocked. Why did a boulder fall ? What was happening ? Then they saw a figure lit up by the moon at the top of the mountain... and they understood.


Very short, but very good.
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Cliffhanger makes me want MORE

Well I was really tired and did not feel like putting it on hold so yeah. Cliffhanger was voluntary
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Chapter 8 : Good At Love
Is it your fault, or is it my thoughts ?
Max : Okay so. To whoever is in my team, I want us to stay together at all times. No separation, not even a single one.
Lely : I think we should go in small groups. VC and Noob, you should go for the beaches. Alice and Ben, try to not fight with each other and go for the hills and the caverns. Me and Nudge will go in the cities, if that is alright, and our meeting point will be the huts.
VC : You have great leadership skills
Nudge : I should complain but I feel like despite being the dumbest, you also have a lot of experience
Max : I think we should head for the mountaintop. There must be something high up there.

And with that, both teams began.
VC : Going from the mountain to the beach is gonna be so hard.
Noob : We should ask for vehicles.
VC : But we don't even have a license !
Noob : Tell me, who cares ?
VC : It's not that, but how do we even find one ?
Noob : True...

Max : Okay, this might be tough. The pathway is very thin, and the slope seems steep. I don't know if it's worth it.
Krazey : At least from there, you can see the fragments shining !
Max : What if they're just lampposts ?
Krazey : Something is up there ! I have a gut feeling.
Max : I think it's kind of dangerous... but okay, if you say so.


And with that, the Teal Team began climbing. Max's feet were slowly trying to walk carefully on the slope that felt almost like it was vertical. After five minutes, people got tired.

Choco : Ahh... I cannot feel my foot...
Angrybird : I feel so tired...
James : I don't trust any of this.
Max : It really does seem dangerous...
Krazey : Everything will be fine... we will get there.
Choco : Wait... I smell something...
Max : What ?
Choco : AHHHH ! BLOOD IS ON MY HAND ! THERE IS BLOOD !


As they started yelling, every of their teammates turned to them. Max used his phone's light to figure out what was happening ; and a dead, crushed Pianta was on the floor, full of blood.

Angrybird : WHAT ??? OH MY GOD !! WE NEED TO GO BACK !!!!
Dayzi : This seems to mean something... but what ?
Max : I don't know... but I'm scared.
Krazey : I... don't know.


And then suddenly, a boulder fell from the top of the mountain. He was going rapidly and was about to crush them. They all started yelling and running for their life, as the boulder continued to roll. After some time they ended up to the point where they were before, scared. Sadly, Max's ankle had twisted and he could not stand up anymore.

Max : I... can't even stand up.

The boy cried, as he felt weak and pained at the same time. The rest of his team was shocked. Why did a boulder fall ? What was happening ? Then they saw a figure lit up by the moon at the top of the mountain... and they understood.
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CyClops wrote:
Mario100 wrote:
Lely wrote:
Lely wrote:
can i join?

name: golend (last name: emerdal)

colour:#6c2791 (hex code)

personality: kind but can be mean

species: idk something to do with dragons?

annoyed by: being told carrots are good for your I sight and being defeated by weak attacks

gender: Female (but they are GAY)

No spots left. And even if there were it would be first came first served, so RedPikmin


whatever but a fanfic shouldnt have a limit on people

Yes it should. Last time I literally had 36 people on the roster. How am I supposed to remember all of them ?? To give all of them good lines ?? And it is super pissy to write overall.

And I'm over here with 20+ people in mine lol 💀

which fanfic?

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Lely wrote:
can i join?

name: golend (last name: emerdal)

colour:#6c2791 (hex code)

personality: kind but can be mean

species: idk something to do with dragons?

annoyed by: being told carrots are good for your I sight and being defeated by weak attacks

gender: Female (but they are GAY)

No spots left. And even if there were it would be first came first served, so RedPikmin


whatever but a fanfic shouldnt have a limit on people

Yes it should. Last time I literally had 36 people on the roster. How am I supposed to remember all of them ?? To give all of them good lines ?? And it is super pissy to write overall.
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can i join?

name: golend (last name: emerdal)

colour:#6c2791 (hex code)

personality: kind but can be mean

species: idk something to do with dragons?

annoyed by: being told carrots are good for your I sight and being defeated by weak attacks

gender: Female (but they are GAY)

No spots left. And even if there were it would be first came first served, so RedPikmin
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Lely wrote:
To everyone here, would you rather :
- have the members in their team colors (Nudge is green, I am green, Krazey is teal, Max is teal) - react with Koopa
- have the members in their own colors (Nudge is orange, I am green, Krazey is mediumorchid, Max is teal) - react with mario facepalm

The vote has ended. 6 people who are in the fanfic voted for the first option and 2 voted for the second option.

I will be having every member in their team color for Chapter 8.
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I think that @TheNudgyHampter
@Senko
@Dietsoda
@Xx-Alyssa-xX
@osc-omb
@Noob68
@NotThatKrazey
@VC
@Dayzi_MK
@TwilightGD
make excellent and top quality tracks, don't you think?

C'mon bro that's my topic, you could've at least mentioned me.

More seriously, this is not the place
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CyClops wrote:
Lely wrote:
CyClops wrote:
Lely wrote:
CyClops wrote:
Lely wrote:
CyClops wrote:
Lely wrote:
To everyone here, would you rather :
- have the members in their team colors (Nudge is green, I am green, Krazey is teal, Max is teal) - react with Koopa
- have the members in their own colors (Nudge is orange, I am green, [quote=CyClops][quote=Lely][color=green]To everyone here, would you rather :
- have the members in their team colors (Nudge is green, I am green, Krazey is teal, Max is teal) - react with Koopa
- have the members in their own colors (Nudge is orange, I am green, Krazey is mediumorchid, Max is teal) - react with mario facepalm
the rest?

What do you mean the rest ???

like Alyssia, ben, etc

Well yeah I am only giving a few examples...

k also do you wanna rank all the characters cause why not :p

Yeah I guess lol

13 - James
I literally struggle to find good lines for him. I failed to make a good personnality for him so he's just kind of an airhead in his own world I guess, but his character is my least favorite.


12 - Choco
They were an introvert and did not reveal much, so I decided to give them sort of the basic personnality. But that kind of character is good to balance things out and to have some normal lines I guess. Although individually, not much for them...


11 - Angrybird
Same for him but he has a lot more personnality on the forums so I guess it's my fault. I will give him a lot of character development later.


10 - Dayzi
The last of the NPCish characters. He doesn't give much of a fuck about anything though, which is a good personnality trait to add. He is also mostly sleepy so his lines can be more on the "idc do what you want lol" side instead of the boring side.


9. Noob
Okay, we did step forward. But not totally, which is the situation for our Nooby noob. I failed to give him the more... edgy personnality he can sometimes. But that is also my fault, a lot of development is planned.


8. Krazey
For a guy that has a lot of personnality, I used some, but not enough I think. On the other side though, his edgy pervert personnality does not fit the fanfic as much as MKPCverse which is much darker. So there is that too. He is still a fun character to write though.


7. Max
Despite being an OG I failed to reconstitute his personnality since it changed a lot, and his character is kind of lacking. He is protective and at the center of things, but that is actually about it. I expected more to be honest.


6. Eli
For the plot he is amazing, but I would have gotten tired of his violent personnality with time even if he wasn't kicked out. I never know how to moderate things without them becoming too peaceful, so there is that too.


5. Ben
Another character that is awesome for the plot. He is basically the brat that nobody likes, and a lot of character development is possible, but for now he is still not my favorite to work with.


4. Lely
My character is pretty sensitive as for now. I think me being the author of this fanfic, my character is not actually a huge crybaby, which is good. But I also feel like I could go further with my personnality. Since, I like writing my own character lmao.


3. Alice
An amazing character with the right amount of fire that I was able to stop with a transition episode. I think her being kind of sassy without being outright mean to people most of the time is an amazing character trait tbh.


2. VC
She is the favorite child, and I am not ashamed. I love working with her easy going personnality, I love the fact she gets overwhelmed by the fighting very quick and yet has some personnality. Her being an OG adds to that special feel I have, overall I love writing with her lmao. Call me biased I don't care.


1. Nudge
Who the hell do you want at the top except Nudge ? Maybe he is not mean enough, yeah. But his personnality can be used a lot, mean and serious at the same time, and yet not a complete asshole with some moments where it is toned down. The coldness is quite balanced actually, which I guess is good. It's crazy how he hates me but he's my favorite character to write lol

fight me but Ben is 1 otherwise just put Krazey higher

Krazey would have been higher if he had a personnality like in my other fanfics. Ben can be 1st if you are a reader like you, since he contrinutes a lot to the plot, but he is not the most enjoyable to write lol
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CyClops wrote:
Lely wrote:
CyClops wrote:
Lely wrote:
CyClops wrote:
Lely wrote:
To everyone here, would you rather :
- have the members in their team colors (Nudge is green, I am green, Krazey is teal, Max is teal) - react with Koopa
- have the members in their own colors (Nudge is orange, I am green, [quote=CyClops][quote=Lely][color=green]To everyone here, would you rather :
- have the members in their team colors (Nudge is green, I am green, Krazey is teal, Max is teal) - react with Koopa
- have the members in their own colors (Nudge is orange, I am green, Krazey is mediumorchid, Max is teal) - react with mario facepalm
the rest?

What do you mean the rest ???

like Alyssia, ben, etc

Well yeah I am only giving a few examples...

k also do you wanna rank all the characters cause why not :p

Yeah I guess lol

13 - James
I literally struggle to find good lines for him. I failed to make a good personnality for him so he's just kind of an airhead in his own world I guess, but his character is my least favorite.


12 - Choco
They were an introvert and did not reveal much, so I decided to give them sort of the basic personnality. But that kind of character is good to balance things out and to have some normal lines I guess. Although individually, not much for them...


11 - Angrybird
Same for him but he has a lot more personnality on the forums so I guess it's my fault. I will give him a lot of character development later.


10 - Dayzi
The last of the NPCish characters. He doesn't give much of a fuck about anything though, which is a good personnality trait to add. He is also mostly sleepy so his lines can be more on the "idc do what you want lol" side instead of the boring side.


9. Noob
Okay, we did step forward. But not totally, which is the situation for our Nooby noob. I failed to give him the more... edgy personnality he can sometimes. But that is also my fault, a lot of development is planned.


8. Krazey
For a guy that has a lot of personnality, I used some, but not enough I think. On the other side though, his edgy pervert personnality does not fit the fanfic as much as MKPCverse which is much darker. So there is that too. He is still a fun character to write though.


7. Max
Despite being an OG I failed to reconstitute his personnality since it changed a lot, and his character is kind of lacking. He is protective and at the center of things, but that is actually about it. I expected more to be honest.


6. Eli
For the plot he is amazing, but I would have gotten tired of his violent personnality with time even if he wasn't kicked out. I never know how to moderate things without them becoming too peaceful, so there is that too.


5. Ben
Another character that is awesome for the plot. He is basically the brat that nobody likes, and a lot of character development is possible, but for now he is still not my favorite to work with.


4. Lely
My character is pretty sensitive as for now. I think me being the author of this fanfic, my character is not actually a huge crybaby, which is good. But I also feel like I could go further with my personnality. Since, I like writing my own character lmao.


3. Alice
An amazing character with the right amount of fire that I was able to stop with a transition episode. I think her being kind of sassy without being outright mean to people most of the time is an amazing character trait tbh.


2. VC
She is the favorite child, and I am not ashamed. I love working with her easy going personnality, I love the fact she gets overwhelmed by the fighting very quick and yet has some personnality. Her being an OG adds to that special feel I have, overall I love writing with her lmao. Call me biased I don't care.


1. Nudge
Who the hell do you want at the top except Nudge ? Maybe he is not mean enough, yeah. But his personnality can be used a lot, mean and serious at the same time, and yet not a complete asshole with some moments where it is toned down. The coldness is quite balanced actually, which I guess is good. It's crazy how he hates me but he's my favorite character to write lol
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CyClops wrote:
Lely wrote:
CyClops wrote:
Lely wrote:
To everyone here, would you rather :
- have the members in their team colors (Nudge is green, I am green, Krazey is teal, Max is teal) - react with Koopa
- have the members in their own colors (Nudge is orange, I am green, Krazey is mediumorchid, Max is teal) - react with mario facepalm
the rest?

What do you mean the rest ???

like Alyssia, ben, etc

Well yeah I am only giving a few examples...
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CyClops wrote:
Lely wrote:
To everyone here, would you rather :
- have the members in their team colors (Nudge is green, I am green, Krazey is teal, Max is teal) - react with Koopa
- have the members in their own colors (Nudge is orange, I am green, Krazey is mediumorchid, Max is teal) - react with mario facepalm
the rest?

What do you mean the rest ???
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To everyone here, would you rather :
- have the members in their team colors (Nudge is green, I am green, Krazey is teal, Max is teal) - react with Koopa
- have the members in their own colors (Nudge is orange, I am green, Krazey is mediumorchid, Max is teal) - react with mario facepalm
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Line Distribution for Chapter 7 - Strawberry Moonlight

1. Lely - 11

2. Max - 10
Nudge - 10
VC - 10

3. Choco - 7
Krazey - 7
Alice - 7

4. Noob - 6
Angrybird - 6
James - 6
Ben - 6
Dayzi - 6

Some really good lines for VC and Choco here lol
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Chapter 7 :
Strawberry Moonlight




Shamrock Peak was the most magnificent place to be at night. The stars were sparkling and the moon was glowing upon the sea. Everything looked so beautiful. The lights of the archipel's cities were also bringing some celebrating tones to the beautiful view.

Cameron : Oh y'all are finally here. Anyways I will be going now, since I have more important things to do than watching kids fighting on a mountain Ster : What do you have to do ? Have pleasure with your wife ? Oh but I forgot, you have none !
The ensemble of the MKPCians looked awkwardly at each other.
Max : Why are we arriving in the middle of beef ? Seriously ?
Nudge : It's not beef. It's a cow.
Noob : It's not pork. It's a pig.
Choco : It's not meat. It's an animal.
Angrybird : STOP RIGHT NOW ! THEY MIGHT GET MAD AT US !
Ster and Cameron exchanged a last glance of defiance and anger. Nobody could tell why they were this mad. Then they remembered.
Lely : We need Chuck. But he probably won't come
Max : What a shame. The beautiful view is ruined by two dumbasses arguing with each other.
Cameron went up to Max and he glared at the kitsune for ten seconds before slapping him across the face. Lely, knowing a fight would be sparked if he bit back, just glared darkly at Cameron. Cameron tssked and with that, he was off.
Lely : Nobody likes this bitch ! Why is he still around if he is just going to complain ?
Alice : Careful with what you say, there are ears everywhere.
Nudge : Yeah but that dumb penguin is saying the truth for once. Let him express his only valid opinion
Krazey : Oof, that was a backhanded compliment.
Nudge : That's the only thing this asshole is ever getting from me
Alice : Oof, why so violent ?
Krazey : Lely should clap back in the next 10 seconds if he doesn't want to lose ! 10 ! 9 ! 8 !
Alice : Erm this is not MMA or something...
Krazey : It isn't ?
Choco : What are we being dragged into...
James : We should let Ster explain
Ster : Except that I have nothing to explain. This round was planned by Chuck, but that lazy ass is not here right now.
Noob : You don't even know what is the main objective ?
Ster : No, sorry. Also this shall remain between us, but I have HAD it with Cameron. Chuck is also starting to have enough so we will see if there is a way to talk it out.
Lely : Yeah right he is unbearable
Max : But is discussing even an option with this kind of guy ?
Ster : I don't know but it costs us nothing to try.
Angrybird : Well at least now that he's gone, we can enjoy the view ! The archipel is so beautiful at night, especially seen from here...
James : Just like watching Wuhu Island from the top of the mountain !
Choco : The grass is far more natural here, and the cities are bigger so it's overall much prettier imo
James : Yeah but Wuhu Island has sports
Noob : Well this place has a tournament aswell
Angrybird : Are we REALLY debating over THIS out of ALL THINGS ???
Before said debate could go any further, Chuck arrived and brought it to a hard stop.
Chuck : Hi everyone ! I will be straight forward about the rules tonight, you have to get down from the mountain. It seems weird but anyways. There will be two teams : the Green team and the Teal team. The teams' names speak for themselves : the Green Team will have Lely as captain and the Teal Team will have Max as captain.
Ben : Oooh this will be interesting
VC : I literally feel the drama coming like cheap cherry perfume
Dayzi : Let Chuck continue
Chuck : Well, rock paper scissors.
To select the teams.

Lely chose paper and Max chose rock. The selection began then.
Lely : I choose Nudge, obviously.
Nudge : I should complain but both options are bad anyways
Max : I pick Krazey
Krazey : I feel like in a parallel universe, he hates me to the point that he permanently wants me gone
Lely : I pick Alice
Alice : Yay I'm not with the fox
Max : I pick Dayzi
Dayzi : Okay ig
Lely : I pick VC
VC : Yay, the two trans girls are on the same team ^^
Max : I pick Angrybird
Angrybird : Nice !
Lely : I pick Noob
Noob : Cool
Chuck : *CHUCKles* Max, pick two members.
Max : James and Choco
James : Yay !
Choco : Oh shoot... that means the other team ends up with...
Lely : Ben...
Ben : Hi ! That's me !
Dayzi : They were tricked...
VC : Oh no, here we go
Nudge : This is unfair. Everybody is quite calm, but this is unfair. We won at RPS, and we were told we would have an advantage. Why would you rip it out from our hands ?
Chuck didn't say a word. Then Max's voice started again. Like a ring tone. But the annoying 80s one.
Max : Well technically it is not that unfair considering I have NPCs on my team, like James or Choco, and you got Nudge. Having a bad member is compensating for having the best member. While for me, I am in between. It is fair.
Nudge : How is that fair ? Your logic is from the Backrooms !
James and Choco : And why are we NPCs ?
Ben : YOU ALL ARE UNBEARABLE TO ME ! FIRST OFF YOU TREAT ME AS SHIT. SECOND, YOU LITERALLY MAKE ME FEEL LIKE A BURDEN !!
Lely : This is not about you... this is about it all being unfair, and yes sometimes you are annoying. Don't act like you were the cutest sweetheart for the first days. We all know.
Noob : Something is at least right in Max's reasonment. If the hole, Ben, patches itself, then we have more quote unquote material. While they would have less, but with no hole.
Ben : Stop saying I am a hole !!
Dayzi : Tssk. Then stop being one.
VC : Can everyone calm down ! Please !
Nudge : This is rigged.
Alice : This is all to make the round more interesting... but what this round should be is fair, not entertaining.
Ben : AHHHH ! WHY IS EVERYONE AGAINST ME ?
Nudge : And why is this about you ? Bro thought he was Max
Max : SHUT UP YOU INSUFFERABLE AMOUNT OF FUR SHIT !
Alice : As if you weren't one yourself 💀
Max : That joke is stale
Nudge : So is your brain
VC : We need to work together as a TEAM ! NOT FIGHT !
Dayzi : Yeah but humans are stupid anyways
Krazey : Jeez can't the Europeans stop arguing ?
Choco : LISTEN TO CHUCK ! RIGHT NOW !
Angrybird : GUYS WHY ARE WE FIGHTING ?
Chuck : It's me ! Hi ! I'm the problem it's me !
Krazey : Is everyone becoming like Max today ??
Dayzi : I guess so
VC : Please... enough...
Chuck : ... Anyways, what you have to find are the fragments of a star. There is 30 fragments, and they are magical so you cannot see them if they weren't made for your team. The first team to have reconstitued the star must bring it back here, to Ster. When both stars will be complete though, something will be set free from the mountain...
Lely : Wow...
Angrybird : What is it ??
Krazey : You think they're gonna tell you ?
James : I'm so excited !!
Ben : I will stay here since nobody wants me
VC : Decidedly everyone is turning into Max tonight
Lely : Well. Let's do this, together. As long as we work as a team and don't argue for petty things like these, we might win. Let's try our best okay ?
VC : That was a beautiful speech !
Nudge : Ew, cheesy
VC : Well, everyone needed that...
Noob : Agreed. Now...
Choco : Let's...
Alice : Get...
VC : Started.

MKPC Archipel
2024 Season
Chapter 7

The end
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CyClops wrote:
but if you are...

name: Obadiah
personolity: likes people who calls him names but is a bit revengy YEP THATS TOTTALLY A WORD SHUT UP
color: #d663aa

- also has ADHD cause why not
-watchs BFDI
-actually thinks ben is not too bad except when he and allyisa argue
-if anything even SLIGHTLY touches his head, hes knocked out


She isn't Lely, and Lely's a boy anyway lol
So yeah sadly applications are closed

your not lely

Yeah but what both girls here said is true

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